Letter to the aditor.

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November 5, 2012

The Editor
Ynet
POB  61972
Tel Aviv

To the(ww.-Dear) editor,

I was read(gr.) your article "Righting a Wrong" in the weekend newspaper, in which you discussed affirmative action for women. I was reading too(gr.+phr.) the response letter from Jeffery Hartmann, and I must to(מיותר) say that I am(gr.) not completely agree with his letter. It's true that today there is more equality between men and women, but it's not enough.
I think that there are some(ww.) reasons to have affirmative action for women today. First of all, it's true that there are women in high-level jobs, (more) than in the past. But at a lot of(phr.-there many) cases in which woman(ww.-write the plural form) is(gr.) at the same as man as role(phr.), the women's salary is lower than the men's salary.   
Secondly, the acceptance conditions for women are different for(ww.-than) men. For women, it is more difficult to be accepted to the job because, in the past certain jobs were designated only for men for the say that women couldn't able do that(gr.). So now, when women can(ww.) accepted to those jobs, there is bigger expectations from them.

So yes, it's true that it's the time to changed(gr.) our ideas. But, not about affirmative action for  women , however, about women's rights in their workplace(phr.).
Sincerely yours,
Dana Hen.



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Daphna

Make a difference

We all want (to)make a difference in life, but as individuals persons(מיותר) we underestimate our importance. ?After all, what can  one person change in the whole world

I think that as an individual we can do nothing, but as a group, we can do everything. Yet, how can we become a group if we haven't(ww.+gr.) individuals before? Any(ww.) person needs some goal in life, and when each individual unites with another individual with (a) similar goal they have become a group with one goal which does everything for this goal. A group consists of individuals. As a group, they can move things and make a difference.

To sum up, individuals can do nothing, but do a lot if they have goals. - This is not a concluding paragraph, it's one sentence that doesn't say much. You are also missing a whole paragraph. I'm afraid you'll have to better than that. This is not a complete essay. Please rewrite.

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Daphna  

Parents-children relationships

Parents-children relationships are complicated, especially when children turn into raging teenagers, who defy their parents to reach their independence. They will do anything to keep far away from their parents' care. They will talk back to their parents, argue and rival them so their relationships with their parents will be damaged.

My relationship with my parents is very complicated with a lot of punishments, arguments and crying. However, we have those little happy moments like every normal family. Most of the time, we argue about stupid things, saying hard words that hurt us, but we know this isn't supposed to occur. Sometimes, we spend many weeks without talking to each other. Yet, as we know to fight we also know to apologize and forgive.

I think that there is more than one reason for the problematic relationships between parents and children. First, their strong inclination to keep us in their field of view. They want to keep us from suffer(ing)  but forget that we are adults and responsible for our actions and sometimes need space and independence to take care of ourselves. The second reason is the difference between the generations. When they were youngsters, their values ​​and conventions were different from these days. I believe that we can overcome all the arguments and achieve peace at home by listening, if one of the sides is more patient to the other, I think that most of our problems at home will be solved.

To sum up, there will always be arguments and complicated parent-children relationships, but there is a solution to improve the situation at home, and save the relationship between parents and children.

Excellent work
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Team sports or individual sports?

Some people prefer team sports, while others prefer individual sports. People with different natures will prefer different things. When people choose to prefer team sports, it shows that their  personality is different than people who choose individual sports. Our choices in life, usually indicate our personality and are being influenced by them.

In my opinion, team sports are better than individual sports, since team sports affect our lives. When we're together in a team, we improve our sociability and our leadership abilities. When we play with other people in a team, it requires cooperation with the other members of the team, and patience, which prepares us for the future.  Another reason is that we can meet a lot of new friends.

Although I prefer team sports, there are benefits to individual sports as well. When you play alone, you can focus on ourself, and do what ever you want in the way which is right for you. You can set the rules to yourself, which improves the fun of the game.

To sum up, there are benefits to team sports and individual sports. It's Difficult to choose according to the advantages or disadvantages and so every person will choose according to his athletic abilities and personality. If i had to choose, it would be the team sports beacause I'm better when I'm not alone.